oh my gosh wow... just wow. this is amazing jdhsjgklhdfg how do you even words

wow i love the dark undertones in this whoaa... you have really great diction? like aside from the story itself the words are like. aaahhhh *_* Actual Brilliant Poet Douchebag, good job

"and there were eyes in the back of her head and the tip of her tongue/so she could see down his throat and find the man within" ... and the parenthesis part? wow! i'm insanely jealous of your talent. keep it up!

Makes me think too much.