Paragraphs 2 & 3: Interjections, including direct address, are set off with commas. "There you are(COMMA) Stelmaria," her mother said sharply.
"I'm sorry(COMMA) Mother," Stelmaria began as she tried to catch her breathe. Like this one: "Well, this is where we part ways, my dear," Leon said, with 'my dear' set off by commas -Also, to breathe is the verb; breath is the noun. '...catch her breath.

Paragraphs 4 & 5: Need to be divided into two or more paragraphs. 4) After "Straighten your blouse" the subject of the paragraph switches back to Stelamaria, in what should be a new paragraph. 5) Here, after '...she was not really supposed to buy anything', another subject change, another new paragraph.
There's a certain amount of head-hopping going on. In the same paragraph, you switch from '...told her mother everything...' to 'Maybe she imagined it...' which is S. thought, even though this paragraph starts out with Adrina as the speaker.

Raven Darkwater
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That, my friend, is what you call a badass name.

I like your descriptive writing style, and so far, I like Dante.
-Alex

Stupid website won't let me review chapter three twice. It doesn't realize that you did the smart thing and combined chapters. Anyway, Raven gets to use magic now. Nice. You never said that the old lady's name was Maud. you just called her Maud. That could be fixed, and I also think that a bit more character development for Lazaar, Dusk, and Dante could be useful.
-Alex

I think this is a good introduction- just the right balance of description and dialogue to hook me.

I'm also intrigued by the character Stelmaria. I want to find out what her place in the setting is- you've raised a very interesting plot.

Interesting, and I like your descriptive writing style. That really long paragraph at the end of the chapter probably could have been divided into four.
-Alex

I like how descriptive your story is. Most of the time that's the diffrence between a good story and a great one.

I like your style of writing, but where is the plot?
-Alex

This is interesting, but more plot development would be useful.
-Alex