Hey there! I'm Michelle, and you read one of my stories and reviewed it. So, in return, I decided to come read yours. It's really interesting and good, and I want to know what happens next. I was a little bored at first, though, but I'm glad that I kept reading! Update soon(:

This is quite entertaining (the first two chapters were a bit slow, though). I haven't hear the Who's On First routine in quite a while. Very refreshing.

If you haven't already, I would stick to the comedic vein; you have a knack for it—for the wordplay, especially. I would try to include a bit of slapstick comedy—it'll help you let your characters perform actual actions without having to turn off the funny. You're already well on your way with the crystal scene, in particular. However, you should be careful: don't let Whut's and David's personalities become too similar, because, then, things will start to get boring. The best comedies are those where different (especially, wildly different) characters bounce off of each other like so many ping-pong balls.

Looking forward to see what happens