|Reviews for Reflection|
| Small Wings Flying 8/23/12 . chapter 1
Okay...first thing I'd suggest is breaking this up with stanzas (ie. enforcing line breaks or, if your computer doesn't allow that, some form of dividers) and punctuation to vary the pauses and make them more effective, because this comes out as a rather large block of text and that doesn't help in making it visually appealing. For example, the first line is a stand alone, but the third and fourth link in to one another.
The other thing I don't particularly like is the rhymes that sneak in, because the themes and images just appear a little inappropiate for that sort of softer melody. In any case, I love the images you've portrayed here. The constant reflections, the sense of direction (particularly the fan - clever) and the addition of the innocence picture at the end.
| Bryan 8/21/12 . chapter 1
HOW DO YOU DO THAT ?
It is like you can put yourself in the palce of any person... real or not...
and just holy fuck. that is so crazy
| dokidokipanic 8/21/12 . chapter 1
classic case of PTSD...i think this is what the main narrator is suffering from...good job as always dude!