Wow, this was really good! I know what it's like to contemplate suicide and to think about what would happen to other people if you left. That's what has ultimately stopped me. The one thing that I don't like about this story is the very last paragraph. I think that it should hav ebeen broken into two paragraphs instead of one big paragraph. But other than that, this is very very good!

Wow, intense. You've come a long way in your writing, Lil Jakey :D