I think your style of writing is great, its so descriptive and the emotion was (for me) intense.

You captured very well the panic and outright terror of this persons situation, and I really wish there was more to read, but the content in this made up for that.

Amazing job, keep on writing! :)

That was intense and as Perswante said, rather exercise-ish. But you worked it out good, and that's why I'm sure the best of us wish it was more of a fleshed-out story.

Damn that's some horror story...

Interesting(although not entirely original) premise! The descriptions and word choices were excellent, a nice little mesh of text, not really worth being called a story but still great nonetheless. More of an artistic exercise is how I see it.