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Satine Onyx 2/25/13 . chapter 1I'm glad to meet someone who knows what haiku means ! Well done! |
Anihyr Moonstar 9/15/12 . chapter 1I like the opening line - [All are so fragile] - it adds a nice sense of desperation, emphasizing how very temporary human life is. However, I can't really get into the "theme" of the poem because it feels cliche to me - done too many times, and not in an inventive enough way to make it stand out on its own. I think if you worded it right, though, you might be able to get it to work. :) - Moonstar, Courtesy of the Review Game's Review Marathon - link in my profile |
Adolf Rosaline 9/1/12 . chapter 1dis mai fist stori./ gtfo if u dun liek. mmk mmk kk.. . k Scether threw Sess onto the bed, while she pulled two tubes of pink KY jelly from her pockets. "This'll make it slipprier" she said, in a playful tune, as she tumbled down on top of Sess with her hands beside Sess's head, making Scether firmly on top. Her hair draped the couple in a cover of dark brown, scether make the first move, by sloppily toung-kissing Sess. Sess slyly moved her hands to Scether's hips, putting her thumbs in Scether's pockets and slowly pulling down her pants. Then Scether did the unexpected, she shit in scethers mooth through the whole in her punts, and eventually shit out a dinosaur egg. Then the egg hatched and Taylor crawled out and went up scethers anis. It was clear by then that Sess was dead, so Ines set her on fire and rubbed her ashes into her anus. This pleased Taylor. Then Barney the dinosaur smahed open the wall in a coll-aid bown with a shotgun. "GIVE ME BACK MY KID YOU WHORE!" He yelledd as he shooted the roof and walls, Scether suddenly had a flash back to the affair she had had with barney months ago, when she was just a young water buffalo. It was clear that Barney wanted his kid back, as scether had forced him to smoke weed everyday while watching jersey shore christman speshul with a cameo from Jasper, in a scether where he drinks shit from the waters of jersey. The kid then sed "i mus go 2 muh hoem plannit." adnd flew to his hoem -o planniet XD But then barnet killed scether adn used his intentines as a condom to use while he masturbuating furiously and birned down orphananges. adn den he got into jayyel and got bumrapped. le edn XDXDXXDXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXDDDDDD DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD |