Cool story!

I loved the part about leaders and followers.

Okay, do you like how I didn't notice that I didn't read chapter fourteen and just went straight to fifteen and now am reviewing chapter fourteen? *sniggers* I know, I'm a weirdo. So, I'd just like you to know that while it was good when I didn't know what was going on so much... it's even better now. XD XD

I FINALLY GOT AROUND TO READING THIS AND I THINK IT SHOULD BE A MOVIE! *humphs* So go on, get on with it, turn it into a movie script! XD Just kidding, but seriously, it would scare the living FUCK out of me. XD

Its quite a good one

That was amazing! Super creepy and perfect for Halloween! Thanks for the mention, by the way. You made an awesome story!

Guess thats it huh? What a chilling ending! I was also listening to Taylor's Swift Haunted to give it a more creepy effect! Its like the dolls and Alice switch place; now they want freedom while Alice is the cruel ruler! This is going on my favorites!

nice job with all of this, it is great :D

is it over O.o

OHMAHFRICKINGOD! NOOOO! AAAALIIIIIIICCCCCEEEEEEEE!

Perfect for Halloween, this needs to be a movie!

Holy shiznips! SCARIES! But, I think if I were Alice... I would've broken them. All of them. With an ax. *manic grin* It sounds fun, eh?

Oh no not Alice...

Scary...

Just looked over across my bedroom, guess what? About six porcelain dolls just sitting on my shelf. I collect them and now they're scaring me... :/

For a nine year old, she has quite a... colorful... vocabulary. I liked this a lot, there were limited typos and the story flowed in its own morbid little way. I liked how the style was very advanced for a child of that age (I certainly couldn't write that well) and I think that if the writing had been simple like a child's it wouldn't have worked with the story. I also liked the way Betsy so nonchalantly passed Martin along. Great work!