|Reviews for Flawed|
| Krystal Watters 12/8/12 . chapter 1
Just telling us "he was this, he was that. He wasn't this, he wasn't that" is not the best way to go about a description. "Show don't tell" is the common phrase for this. Show us how modesty isn't one of his virtues rather than telling us.
And all stories, no matter how short or long, should have some plot arc. Even if it's three sentences long it should have a beginning, middle, and end. I don't quite see that here...