Wow, very strong imagery in this piece. I love the wordplay too, and just the general vocabulary. You have a wonderful sense of sound in your writing.

Whoa...you were about to not post this?

This is so beautiful, and I don't entirely understand it but what I got from it was just amazing. Your poetry is like the kind we have to study in class so shame on you, but still really awesome!

For some reason, this stuck out:

"Remote is the currency of control
Buttons on my calculator
Pressed X - in darkness
The depression of mystories"

Why is this so great? I think it's the 'in darkness' bit, to do it in darkness, that makes it so haunting...

especially since it followed:

"To stay a metre from the screen
Clawing bright blue carpet
Once scene is seen
Means tremors"

It sets a chilling image for me...mostly sad, like he doesn't want to see/know? (Trying here haha)

Could you explain to me this stanza?

"Pondered snipping strings
Of that salient swing
As to hap across the gap
Between our bodies
Should snap my own"

It is so...elegant, the way you wrote it. These were my favorite lines, but I want to know what they mean haha.

And from your last message, about the footnotes, that would probably be a good idea haha