Well, I'm so-so on this story for the cliche of it. It's not really all that cliche, yet I feel you took Nancy Drew's name and changed it. And took the smarts of Sherlock Holmes (Sherlock Holmes is way better than Nancy Drew in my opinion). Therefore, I can't really tell you, but cliche or not, there's always time to edit or redo, if you'd like.

-Hermie