|Reviews for OC's Needed! Apocalypse|
| Schwan 5/1/13 . chapter 9
Hey, nice chapter! More people and many more possibilities! This story is coming along quite well! You've managed to incorporate dozens of characters into your story without missing a beat. That's well done. Great work!
I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors! Although, in the thirds from last paragraph, I did spot a little switch from past to present tense. Other than that, it was perfect! Wonderful work!
Update soon please!
| Terra Booma 4/17/13 . chapter 9
Nice Chapter, keep up the good work!
| Terra Booma 4/14/13 . chapter 1
Name (and nickname if any): Hunter
Appearance (Hair, eyes, significant scars, etc.): Messy Brown Hair, Blue eyes
Personality (Specific!): Hunter's grown a bit distant having everyone around him die or turn into a zombie, but there's a shell of his old self inside, that friendly caring one. But until then, he doesn't even talk unless it's an emergency.
Genesis (Can be anything useful): Has minor spell skills, with a lot of strength (unknown to him) in Air spells.(He'll probably try to fly using air currents eventually.) But he can use all manners of spells, from Air, to water, to Healing, just a lesser extent. The thing is somehow his (Insert-thing-that-rhymed-with-Aura-here) has been sealed by an outside source, causing him to not now about it.
History:Before everything went to hell, as he likes to put it he was a friendly student at the age of 15. He wan't very popular and probably, no, definitely read to much. When the apocalypse started his lost it all, friends, family, stuff, everything. The only things he carries are a back-pack to store things, and a rifle and Knife for defense.
What you think they should do?: I think Hunter should be introduced to the characters looking for survivors, either in trouble or saving them, most likely as he's about to be over-run his genesis will be released, destroying the zombies.
Skills/strengths (include fighting abilities): Hunter is an avid reader, and thus so has learned the basics of other languages, he's ingenuitive, which is why he's survived so long, he's also become a skilled marksman in the times of the apocalypse.
Weaknesses: Since he lost everything, he hates getting to close to people, and is distant because of it, causing him not to know others very well. (unless someone gets to know him.) Also his Genesis takes a lot of energy out of him, at least until he gets it under control. something that he in NO way has.
Likes: Animals, especially wolves, good food. people who aren't zombies
Dislikes/Pet Peeves: Zombies, Cruel people, people that hurt animals, getting close to people.
Age & Year/teacher: 15, I'm guessing year one since he hasn't been to the school before.
Love Interest (optional): N/A
Stuff I Missed/Other: He probably won't say a word to the people he meets until he releases his ability, which will probably be followed with a "I don't want to die!" after that, he'll only talk in short burst
Anyway, I don't know if you''re still accepting OC's, but here's one anyway, A PM with details on the classes would be nice, but I'm find without it. Keep up the amazing work!
| Schwan 3/29/13 . chapter 8
It was kind of interesting to see how normal people would react to kids with powers. It was also cool to see some different powers and how the outside world is faring. Listeners. Hm...good name. I like it! (Despite the fact that their flesh-eating monsters) I think it's also interesting how you have different types of "zombies" (I don't know what else to call them). Anyways, a great chapter! Keep it up!
Update soon please!
| SkullRising 3/25/13 . chapter 8
Sorry I'm a bit late in reviewing. This is a very well-done chapter! Dialogue is realistic and not particularly repetitive, and I like the darker take on this. Your description of the Listeners was great. My only criticism (well, it's more of just a tip) is that when describing a male character, the correct term would be "blond" while "blonde" implies a female. Just a little tip.
In any case, nice job. I look forward to the next installment.
| Takato3z4 3/23/13 . chapter 1
welcome back. i'm looking forward to what will happen next.
| Schwan 3/16/13 . chapter 7
Hey! It's been forever since this chapter came out, but I didn't get around to reviewing! Sorry about that!
Anyways, another great chapter. Your descriptions are just like...wow. Great work! And for the fifty-thousandth time, I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors. I think you've gotten all of the personalities spot-on. You're really good at writing other people's Oc's. I think the True Divine Guard idea is really good too. And a question on that: Are the open spots for other OC's, or the ones we've already submitted?
You could call the third captain Kendall or something like that. Make him from Australia or something! XD
Anyways, great chapter, and since it's been a while, update soon please!
| SkullRising 1/21/13 . chapter 6
Sorry, I was on my iPod and accidentally hit send, that's why my review got cut off. Anyway, I was wondering if there was a reason you put certain people in certain Families, like if there was a specific trait or something that was a requirement. (Like in Harry Potter, where there was intelligence, cunning, loyalty, and courage) Or maybe you just put them together at random. I'm just curious. Later!
| SkullRising 1/21/13 . chapter 7
My apologies for not reviewing last chapter, I've been busy. Onto the newest installment.
In the beginning paragraphs and toward the middle, you became a bit repetitive. By this I mean that you used the same word or group of words multiple times in a small time frame. I believe it was your third sentence where you used, "and," about three times in one little group of words. You got better toward the end, though. That seems to be your main problem here, so at least you don't have any huge errors.
I'll end my review with a question: Do the "Families," have a certain reason for people be
| Schwan 1/14/13 . chapter 6
Another great chapter. I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors in this chapter either. A good job with the descriptions too. Nice introduction to the first of the classes. Another job well done. I'd like to submit a teacher for the hand to hand combat class but I'm not sure if ill be able to get them in tonight. Well, god job and keep up the great work! Update soon please!
| Schwan 1/1/13 . chapter 5
Once again great chapter. The action scenes were excellent and you made a great follow up of the last chapter. Your introductions of all the characters are quite good so far too. No grammar or spelling errors that I could see. And hou made this chapter longer than normal too! That made me happy! Another job well done. Keep up the god work and update soon please!
| SkullRising 12/31/12 . chapter 5
Interesting. All in all, you really only have a few errors in spelling and grammar. However, you still keep using the numbers instead of simply writing them out. The story tends to flow better if you write "seventh" instead of "7th", for example. Anyway, nice chapter.
| Kittykatking 12/30/12 . chapter 5
I enjoyed the chapter, in way it got some character intros outta the way. I didn't see mine though DX
| Swallow-tailed Kite 12/17/12 . chapter 4
Love your last sentence. It sounded pretty cool
["Then let's get moving already!" Shouted the younger of the 2 as he started running down the mountain.]
I think it would look better if you just typed out the word two. "Two" is just two letters more than 2 anyway xD Same thing for [2 hours passed before Eira heard Julian again.]
Nothing else to say for grammar and stuff, though you could do with a tad more descriptions. Good job :]
| Schwan 12/16/12 . chapter 4
Once again, great chapter! I love the idea of an Archaion. This story, I must say, IS really original. Great work. Nice descriptions too. I loved the part where you compared Eade's eyes to the grass. I didn't see any errors either! Although, I'd like it more if you made the chapter's longer, it's your way of writing and I respect that. Nice job and keep it up!
Update soon please!