Nice dark poem, keep up the good work!

I love this poem! I like how it rhymed, great job.

i really couldn't help but smile as i got through this poem. it retains this cruel, monstrous voice really well throughout. i loved this rhyme scheme you've got going on - the way it just musically pushed you on and on really makes it fun to read. the sort of beat it has going makes the voice seem even more matter of fact - not emotional, just cruel and unfeeling. which is a feeling in itself really - i enjoyed this, it was fun to read :D
great work.