|Reviews for Creative Writing Challenge|
| True Talker 10/2/12 . chapter 2
Actually this is written quite well and this indeed does make me think. Really I would think that everyone does indeed want to be loved. I know that I want to be loved. A true love, a REAL love - yes something that has meaning. Why wouldn't I? Feeling love is what has encouraged me to help myself - to try and pull myself out of my current situation. Why do I say that? Because it is THE TRUTH.
| Guest 9/19/12 . chapter 2
It really isn't as bad as you seem to think it is. I like it.
Just one thing: at some points, the flow is a little off, which is why the scentences don't seem to rhyme? Because when reading, you want to pause at a different point than where the line of the poem ends (god, I'm sorry if I'm not making any sense).
Still, great job :)
| Amity Goldwell 9/18/12 . chapter 1
"Love" is a complicated but powerful word just like "hate". I've seen people say one word and mean the other. What I liked about the story is that it is very real and not only possible, but I have actually witnessed it. Your language was very poignant in describing the feeling of loss...and as a reader you really want them to get together. You drew me into the story although it was just a few paragraphs long... fantastic! It really describes love beautifully with all its complications! If you read my poem "Sonnet for a lost soulmate" it is about somebody who lost his/her love just because they didnt each want to admit it "first", although the rest of us friends knew they wanted to! Crazy...huh?!
| Yuki Tsubaki 9/17/12 . chapter 1
Aww, that was so cute! So what if it's cheesy?! My eyes got watery! I'm a romanticist, so I was touched lol. I would have liked to see a happy ending though...like he comes up behind her and say, "So?" with a smile on his face. xD But not all love stories have to have an ending, especially short stories. I think that open ending suited it better. :) And it did a great job of showing how falling in love can. That sometimes it isn't so easy to admit it. I don't really have come constructive criticism for you...oh! I do think you should put a bit more space in the long paragraphs. It feels a little clumped. Other than that, great writing! Can't wait to read more of your stories. I'm sure you'll get out of your block soon! Keep writing!
| True Talker 9/15/12 . chapter 1
This was sad and it makes one feel deflated. Why? Because when a person has fallen for another person it HURTS in a HUGE way when they are denied the love in return. Okay, so they may NOT completely know the person as they haven't met them however they know that they feel inspired by them and they know that the person had awoken love within their own heart. They know that the person has helped to direct them in the right direction with their own life and they also know that they feel lost WITHOUT communicating with the person that they have fallen for. They also realize that it would be an AMAZING AND AWESOME thing to REALLY get to know the person that have been communicating with. Find out what someone is REALLY like. This reminds me of how much I had CRIED LAST NIGHT. I DON'T want to cry anymore.
| Andramion 9/15/12 . chapter 1
It wasn't cheesy at all! I actually think it was really good. I think so many could-be relationships never happen because of things like this. And on top if that, I think you reflected that confliction of the moment when you see that person again really well :)
| The Witch's Ghost 9/15/12 . chapter 1
Cute, and pain full at the same time. And trust me, that reflected love well, not the best, but well. I can't wait till te others!