|Reviews for Broken Poetry|
| M K Wolfe 9/16/12 . chapter 1
Hi there _ You've got some great potential here with these broken pieces of poetry. I can definitely feel the love you have for the person, and the pain of a broken relationship. Your emotions come through your words very clearly. :)
I would suggest trying to stick to a pattern though. Group your pieces in terms of lines and stanzas, instead of paragraph/sentence form. It makes the flow easier to follow if you do that. Also, the flow should be more consistent, if you are going to rhyme then pick a pattern to the rhyme. When some of the lines rhyme and others don't, in sort of a random mix, it makes the flow of the whole piece feel off and bumpy. Like riding on cobblestone, instead of a paved road.
I look forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future! Keep writing. :)