|Reviews for when the wolf was a god|
| Levitating Narwhal 9/17/12 . chapter 1
I really liked the flow of everything. It may have been better if you spaced the story into paragraphs to make it more coherent. Example: instead of "How did you like the show?", asked peter, looking at his brother. "It was alright.", replied Todd. "The graphics were really good." He continued.
It might be better as: "How did you like the show?", asked peter, looking at his brother.
"It was alright.", replied Todd. "The graphics were really good", he continued.
| Andramion 9/16/12 . chapter 1
I have vowed to review every last thing I open on fictionpress, so here goes:
I like the metafora in this story. I think it would have been better if you had put the explanations (almighty dollar, ussr) at the very bottom, it sort of interferes with the flow of the story.
I love wolves too! I'm so glad to know they are coming back to my country in the wild, even though a lot of people are afraid The Netherlands are going to be too small for them (it's not like they can't cross the borders to Germany of Belgium or anything).
So in short: well done, I think this was good :)