God, that was wonderful. You have a gift. Really. Don't ever stop writing. Oh, and I adore your profile picture! Love me some Ciel, heheh.

With Love,
Princesse Des Cadavres

Wow... There are no words. I was not expecting this.

This is so beautifully creepy, I love it! Please write more!

I like this chapter more.
What I'm saying is; you've improved over time.
What a sad and gruesome existence, especially for one still so young.
So alone, and so twisted.
Lovey work.

I'm glad I had one light on when I read this story...*shudders*

Have mercy, you say? Can't give what you don't have, dear.
In speaking of the overall story, I liked it. Creepy singing and murder abound, with an air of mystery that screams of a sequel (or any extension, really.)
Who, what, when...and most of all, why?! How does someone so small go about committing an enormous monstrosity?
That's what I think.
Also, your mistakes:
"Bending over so that the elder could gazed into half-maddened eyes" GAZE into maddened eyes.
Also, the purple in your prose is annoying:
"Pools of scarlet reflected twin orbs" ...ORBS! My god, I'm so tired of eyes and whatever else round body parts exist being called "orbs." It's not artistic or whatever, it's just pretentious.

Short and sweet,really nicely done ]
Lookin forward to more stuff like this from you ]

Dude. FREAKY! That was so awesome

this is really good. :)