Aww! I loved it but aww! I feel bad for Teya!

You got a great story here miss. But you do have some mistakes here and there, nothing major.
The word cryed should be cried, and the word diddent should be didn't. There were more, but I didn't care. The story is just too good.

Overall you have an interesting premise, and the summary really drew me in. I can't wait for chapter 2.

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