|Reviews for Playing With Fire|
| AchievingNirvana 11/27/12 . chapter 17
Great! Your language is very descriptive. Just one thing. There's a lot of dialouge. Also, it's a little bit confusing. I'm not quite sure of the setting and time again, I'm going to have to read back. The whole Skylar/ghost Skylar thing is confusing me. Otherwise, its very good! I really enjoy reading this. Keep it up!
| Jedi-Of-Rock 10/28/12 . chapter 1
I like the introduction. It's a bit confusing because it starts in the middle of dialogue, but in a way, it's good because Vesta introduces the story afterwards, and very professionally. Aside from minimal grammatical errors, I think this part was written very well! Good job!
| AchievingNirvana 10/21/12 . chapter 9
This was fantastic! Absolutely amazing! You have to write more!
| AchievingNirvana 10/19/12 . chapter 7
I really liked this chapter! The relationship between Fallon and Vesta is growing, I can tell. I really like her! I'm excited to see what happens in the next chapter! Suspense is getting too much to handle- keep it up!
| AchievingNirvana 10/6/12 . chapter 6
I really like this chapter...what you said about elections are true. I like how it's put straight out there in the chapter. I thought it was really well-written, and I really liked the part when Vesta wins the election. The last sentence wrapped it up very nicely! I didn't spot any grammatical errors. Great job!
| AchievingNirvana 9/29/12 . chapter 4
I loved this chapter! The building relationship between Fallon and Vesta is very good, you can see as Vesta loses her harsh feelings for her. Keep it up! This was amazing!
| AchievingNirvana 9/28/12 . chapter 3
Okay, I LOVE your metaphor about the cracks on the ceiling, it was absolutely perfect. I also liked how you mentioned the quicksand chair. You make Vesta's feelings of nervousness and distress really evident in the chapter through VERY descriptive language. I really feel like I know EXACTLY what she feels because of your descriptive language. The only thing I'd say is that I don't think the mention of Lithium was necessary. It's a bit random, not many people might get it (Being a Nirvana fan, I still think it should be taken out). Other than that, this was flawless. Your hard work is evident in here, keep it up!
| AchievingNirvana 9/25/12 . chapter 2
I'm going to post the beta review as a comment so people will get an idea of how fantastic this is. First off, your beginning to this chapter was absolutely brilliant. I, honestly, almost got chills reading it. It was incredible. I find it interesting that you chose to use the present-tense, as I find that hard to write in sometimes. Your main character, Vesta, is a typical schoolgirl that you sort of develop in a way that makes her typical yet unusual at the same time. It gives her a good character. The idea of the "contests" make the plot cliffhanging in a way. I don't think I noticed any grammatical or spelling errors, but if I do, I'll notify you. Keep up the good work! I see this really going somewhere great.