This is very interesting. Your style of writing and your spelling and grammar is very good,but maybe you should make separate paragraphs instead of this being one huge paragraph. It'd be a lot easier to read. But besides that, it's really good! I love the references to the Arthurian legends. :)

Good so far. Definitely going to read more of it.

Great story! I love the little 'Avila Out' and the fact that it is 'never going to get old.' Amuses me.
Amazing!