I have not yet read this... I just wanted to say it's awesome how you draw your own things, ya' know? The webcomic looks great too. ;D keep at your art homie.

First off where did you get the picture for your story.
Secondly instead off TELLING the readers whether a character is good or bad at something you should SHOW the reader that a character is good or bad at something.

Your descriptions are very Bipolar one minute their great the next not so much. Do you only save the good descriptions for important characters or what.

Switching POV is never really good in a story. I mean, maybe a book will have one certain character's point of view for a few chapters, and then it switches to another's. But here, you're doing it wayyyy too much and too often and that throws off the flow of your story. Instead of switching POVs, it'd probably be easier to write in third person and just switch focus on characters. Hope that helps though!

I'm not a huge fan of dumping a lot of your ideas on the reader before they start reading. It can be a tad bit intimidating at times. There's nothing wrong with gradually introducing all these elements of your story in the first chapter. A fairly good set up to the story though; I am not a fan of sticking with heavy cliches. I'm referring to white magic with humans who have to save the world and dark magic with demons who are evil and try to destroy it. I like it when people mix it up a bit, but anyway the last sentence kinda got my hopes back up for your story. I'm wondering who the focus will be on; the humans, the demons, or this mysterious group who I'm guessing is neutral.

Great start it will be a hit great work

What an interesting idea, it sounds pretty cool I hope you add more.

Awesome story please continue It seems awesome and kinda reminds me of bleach mixed with soul eater