|Reviews for Description of a young girl's life|
| neomyth 10/19/12 . chapter 1
well written mate :-)
Maybe if you could put up a bit more of her emotions and her thoughts ,it would be a more expressfull . Her aspirations,dreams,hopes are good places which you could highlight more.
| KillsWithAHammer 10/7/12 . chapter 1
umm...if she doesn't reallyy have much interestt in the videoo game u may as well not mention the namee...it makes u sound a littlee too...informedd i think...?
| ivorygladiola 10/3/12 . chapter 1
I like it. It's pretty and personal without being pretentious. If I had an account I'd favorite. Thumbs up. ")
| JesseCPK 10/2/12 . chapter 1
Try to make it flow a bit smoother...