|Reviews for The Anomaly|
| Travis Ortiz 11/13/12 . chapter 3
Great job, definite improvement and we see some character development. It's a good thing to keep a character constantly improving. Remember to avoid the "superman syndrome" in wich the hero is perfectly good. There needs to be suspense, no one is perfect. Great use of imagery and the description of Melody was exsquiset. I could actually see him in my mind as I read. I noticed a couple of grammar issues, but nothing serious.
| TravisOrtiz 11/4/12 . chapter 2
I am really enjoying this so far. You are use a great variety of descript and imagery words wich really puts the reader IN the story. It's a bit rough around the edges but a little refinement or an editor will fix that easy. Things to remember, avoid "Floating heads" in which a long section of dialog takes place and you don't continue to hint at or describe the passage of time. The reader is left with two heads talking rather than full people. 7 out of 10 so far. )