|Reviews for Trapped in the Middle|
| Ann Simpson 10/27/12 . chapter 3
Let me say I love this story! Written very well. I was drawn in and though I read many things on the internet I immediately knew I had returned to this story. I'm not sure about this part,
Since all god/desss are genderless (or can take any gender at any time), I will use 'e (for he or she) 's (for his/hers) 'self (for himself/herself) h' (for him/her in object case).
It threw me off a bit from the story. I found myself rereading it. I guess I can say I was in this world magically flowing into the lives of your characters and then I was interrupted to learn, the flow for me was broken.
The rest of the story...nice, very nice.
| Ann Simpson 10/16/12 . chapter 1
I like this story, the scene where the girl is struck by the van pulled me in. I think "Tyres" may be "Tires." I also like the way the chapter ended with Cloy knowing he can do amazing things. Leaves me wondering what amazing things are coming in the story. 2nd para toward the end I think you meant "drilled deep into the core."
Hope to see more of this story!