|Reviews for Institute X|
| My Love Pinwheel 4/22/13 . chapter 6
Yay, a new chapter! And the plot unfolds :)
Just one critic, the story goes a little too fast sometimes and you leave out some details that, as the author, you will still understand the story thoroughly, while as readers, need a little bit of thinking and rereading to understand. I'm not saying I don't like this chapter! Just that some lazy people don't like to think. and stuff. yeah... no offense!
ANYWAYS, love this chapter :) I'm curious about how Red's ability helps him with his bombs and hacking (it's sort of like hacking right?)
Can't wait to see what the rest of the Alchemist's nefarious plan for conquest is and how the three main charas have a role in all of it!
PS the new story idea sounds interesting!
| My Love Pinwheel 1/22/13 . chapter 5
BAHAHAHAHA, YES I HAVE INTERNET IF ONLY FOR A FEW MINUTES! And I am spending those few reading your awesome story and reviewing it :)
oh my... who is this- *hit with sudden realization* oh. Oh. OH. oh. (Here's a summation of my thought process: The new dude's called the Alchemist- He's prob the dude who named Argon- Woah, wait, Argon is an element of the table- mindblown)
haha, anyways, I really like this twist! I wonder what's going to happen next :) Keep up the good work!
| My Love Pinwheel 1/8/13 . chapter 4
Oooooo, I wonder what is going to happen next? xD
I'm currently not logged in because I'm on my iPod, mooching off my schools Internet because I don't have Internet at home D: the horror!
I like the small twist at the end! I wonder who did those thing? And Marionette was well named :) and creepy. Reaaaaally creepy xD
There was a small slight confusing part near the beginning: "He muffles a snicker as Argon grudgingly steps on the LiNK. His irritation is evident but it vanishes quickly, replaced with a wide grin. It is so blatantly false that Red almost wants to laugh. However, now is not the time for such frivolities. He saunters aboard the connecting cabin carrying himself in that slouching manner that can only be achieved by real confidence."
It's sorta confusing as to whose talkin about who and stuff it could just be me though xD
Anyways, loved this chapter and can't wait for the next one :)
| My Love Pinwheel 11/26/12 . chapter 3
This story is really interesting :) I wonder what the Professor is going to do next...
Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Nikolai Riktovi 10/10/12 . chapter 2
This was an... interesting chapter. I am intrigued and at the same time frightened. I can't wait to read more.
| Nikolai Riktovi 10/10/12 . chapter 1
Very good, I'll be interested in reading the next chapter tomorrow. However, there are a few mistakes I'd like to point out.
""Doctor, there is no-" a bespectacled women..." You signified a single person but used plural here.
"...every fiber of his being ridged with shock." I'm assuming you mean that his body is stiff. "Rigid" is what you meant. "Ridged" is ribbed or grooved.
All I saw. Sorry I couldn't read Chapter Two tonight.
| Guest 10/6/12 . chapter 1
| Salko 10/4/12 . chapter 1
This story sounds promising! You have a very fluid writing style and it sometimes becomes quite poetic. There's a dreamlike feel to the material so far, and I really like it.
The one issue I have is that, while your descriptions are lovely, I sometimes get a bit lost in the language and lose track of the situation. This is great, though, and I look forward to reading more.