CONTINUE PLEEEEEAAAAAASSSSEEEEEE!
-Inky (or Sky daughter of Zeus)

AWESOME! :)

It's quite a good start, but there are so many mistakes I do not know where to start, sorry.

I like the creativity of this, that's for sure, but a story riddled with errors is too hard to try and read. After all, how can you write with good flow and plot if you did not have your proper grammar set in order first? It's like learning to add and subtract before algebra, you know?

Seems interesting, though a beta would be good, since there are certain mistakes which could have been avoided

Dafooq are quadricorns? :O