I like that you used uncommon names, it really kept up the fantasy vibe this story has going. A few punctuation errors but other than that, I feel this story was well thought out and seems to be put together nicely. I love that you put a prologue. Not sure why, I just really enjoyed that. I guess because you don't see it on FictionPress much.

Really like it! :) please update soon! :)

good start, keep going! (huge paragraphs, kept reading the same line, they all look the same)

I like this story, good work