|Reviews for Rift|
| KimonoQueen 10/18/12 . chapter 1
I like this as an introduction but I think you cannot write a whole story like this. Also, unless the one speaking to us is the writer (you) I should hope that this guide entity will turn out to be a character IN the story. This realm place is intriguing and so is the 'lord'. I was chilled by the line "Don't cry, it doesn't befit you. This being the happiest moment of your life.". Sooooo many meanings and emotions wrapped up in that. Is it cynicism? Sarcasm? The words of a sycophant of the 'lord'? lol I'm looking forward to finding out! I'll "Follow" this story in case you update again.
| Wyzer 10/12/12 . chapter 1
Your prose is weak and the pacing of the format is consistently irregular indicating that this piece is merely the sum of a remainder of an unbalanced equation inherent to the writing style that you have selected.
Also it's for tehgayz.
| Katsurou Shimizu 10/6/12 . chapter 1
In just a few words, you have created an interesting 'limbo' kind of setting which somehow has this lord who leeches on the lifeforce of the tricked. Nice, I look forward to what comes next.
| MadarasGirl 10/6/12 . chapter 1
Very interesting and well written, I would like to read the rest of the story.
| Shoob 10/5/12 . chapter 1
Sounds like you have an idea for something that could be good. I can't say it really is good, since all we're getting so far is a teaser, but it has potential.
| Benehime 10/5/12 . chapter 1
As a prologue this is pretty creative and written pretty well. I just hope the rest of the story doesn't continue like this; any longer and this would start to get confusing. Good job so far, it does look like you have a fairly interesting plot that can be developed from this. Will take a look at your next chapter if you decide to continue!
| RameerLewis 10/5/12 . chapter 1
hope you make this soon, it pretty awesome. short, but awesome!