|Reviews for Protocol|
| Frankie Stien 10/8/12 . chapter 1
Hi! I'd jut like to say, great storyline, and I love the direction this is going, but you have quite a few sentence structure mistakes, and the format for your quotes is confusing. Like in the last sentence; After that I decided I would go to sleep I've had a busy day, but the only thing I could think about was the ball and having to get married soon uuuugggh...
There should be a period after sleep and before I've, a comma after ball and and, a period after soon, and Uuuugggh sould be in italics.
I don't mean to be mean, but I suggest you get a beta reader, or use a spellcheck system. Again, love the plot so far, and don't let me discourage you! Love Frankie