This happens all the time...As I say, "If you don't finish a piece on Fictionpress or Fanfiction, people are gonna throw virtual bricks through your virtual windows. And then you'll have virtual bruises."

For story content, I'd say it was easy to identify with, and that every human on the planet can compare to this. If they don't, they're not human.

As for the actual writing of the story, IT SU-of wait that's not right. It was very well written, with good descriptions. There were one or two misspells in there, but it's not a big deal.

Over all, this was awesome. You should write a sequel-oh wait, you'd probably just go play a net game.

Hahaha... I've tried so far to stay away from that. And so far, I've achieved it. There's a cross-my-heart-and-hope-to-die promise people here on FP should do:

Post stuff you know you'll finish, stuff you've been thinking for while. Not just any random crap you'll lose inspiration in and drop it.

But... stuff happens.

I like this piece, especially written in second person. It makes it much more identifiable. At least on one of your points, I'm sure anyone who read it would say "Yeah..."
With me, it's Spider Solitaire. It allows me to still think about the story and sometimes work out the current kink.
Hope this helped get you over your writer's block. I like your style.

I love it. I like how I can relate to this, mainly because I've too darn lazy to write Soul Candy! because of another story trying to jab it with a pencil in my head. It's crazy. But once I get into the mood, I'm writing it.
People should read this because they should try to convey the message into their own lives. This has made feel like writinPr