This is absolutely amazing. It's got a dark macabre twist on a familliar plot-line. I like the idea of the quarter deciding his fate. You've definitely captivated his almost uncaring tone. I got the feeling that one way or another, it didn't matter what side the quarter fell on.

I like your style... it adds a sense of unease and mystery. I also like the imagery and the personifacation of the quarter. Also, I like how you incorperated "his world of concrete". The tone is perfect for the plot.

Your wording, to me, is like those books children learned lessons from in the 1800's in schoolhouses. Like this, since I'm sure you have no idea what I'm talking about:

'Mary is a girl. The girl has a dog. The dog's name is Bones. Bones likes to bark. He barks into Mary's ear. Mary's ear now hurts.'

There's nothing wrong with the wording, though it may sound like I am saying it is.

-Hermie