I adored the rhythm on this one. Definitely a song quality in it, so melodic and soft... Really engaging. And the fact that you repeat "Dear God" and "Lord, Lord" made the transitions well in synch.

Actually, if you update this again, with a different structure, with the chorus

Dear God,
Call me when you get this,
We need to have a talk.

Lord, Lord,
Things are getting tough down here.
Call me when you get this.

Separated from the rest of the prayers it would look more aesthetically pleasing and would bring a stronger beat to the prayer. My oppinion, of course.

Great text.