Woah...this is really, really powerful poetry...I like the way the story's been put in poetry format-that's really cool. I enjoyed reading it-Dark, powerful and gripping.

R. K. Iris.

Pretty dark, keep it up!

Yo bruh first off this poem is bad but not bad as in good (for you white people that dont cotton to slang its called signifying) Offering specific criticisms of this is pretty difficult but the second line (I release a sigh) is clunky AF. This is about a child witnessing the murder of his mother by his father told in the first person and yet none of the pants defiling terror that a child would experience is properly conveyed.

Freeverse is hard to pull off though

SWAG