|Reviews for The Name Of A Sad Devil|
| Mister Self Destruct 10/17/12 . chapter 3
Very nice chapter, bro. Do more poems like this. Thank you, bro. For this poetic feast.
| Mister Self Destruct 10/17/12 . chapter 1
First, with the summary, a short story written in poetic verse is called a narrative.
| Lia Jenson 10/12/12 . chapter 3
Man oh man, I hate second-person. It doesn't usually get pulled off right, even by the most masterful writers. There's no variety to be had when all that can be said is "you." So usually I hate it...
But not here. You actually did it pretty well.
What you didn't:
"Causing you to look up and begin to (PLEAD)."
"Lifting his scythe to (HIS) shoulder, as he basked"
There also that weird capitalization.
Fix that. I want to be able to call this good poetry.
| Lia Jenson 10/12/12 . chapter 1
That's some brutal poetry, man.
Some brutal amount of mistakes, too:
"Your broken soul had cried out to the mortals that were damn(ed)."
"Only to have their screams be heard as (THEY'RE) torn limb by limb,"
| emoboylover 10/12/12 . chapter 3
Very different and almost sorrowful. It almost makes me feel bad for Lived. Very interesting. I like it.