I really like this, very poem-like even though its under fiction :)

"...get in trouble to get a a laugh." You have a double letter.

Yours is short and sweet as well, though if you decide to edit it, a suggestion of mine is to flesh out the feelings a little bit. You tell a lot of things, explain them. But you don't pull in how it makes "me" feel. Not enough for my taste anyway.

Great job though! :)

I admire your courage. Most of us will always wonder what if, but you know.
I like the way you wrote this piece. It is direct and clear. I also like your descriptions-the smile under blue braces, the eyes light and soft.
You said a lot with few words. Great job!
That guy missed out.

Shucks! Never had this happened to me before but I hope you are okay now.

there is alot of emotion here. That is good many authors starting have a hard time laying their soul on the page. But if you want to create something really good that is where you have to start.
I would have like to see more a of a resolve in the piece. The end leaves you hanging a bit

Wow! Talk about saying a lot with a little!

An interesting piece, although I don't think it's interesting for the sake of "emotion" (which over-saturates most of the work on this site); the text reads in an apostrophic and structurally peculiar way, all the while coolly parsing out action and motivation.

In the first place, personal pronouns abound. Given the subject, it's to be expected. But the curious trick is the qualifiers which help set off the first three paragraphs - "I'm SO sorry," "I TRULY didn't want," "I REALLY liked." The speaker qualifies verbs in order to reinforce their efficacy. Why? To strengthen sentiment, which is to simplify something underpinned by an intricate logic, the rational reflection of thwarted desire.

The action moves well. Again, there is an intricacy to it, in its order of recollections. Always quaint to realize after a time those projections of the future from the past, and why they were originally posited.

On further inspection, a mirrored structure appears, correlating paragraphs 1 & 6, 2 & 5, 3 & 4. The pertinent sections of paragraphs 3 & 4: "I thought you loved me, at least a little bit," "Though I shouldn't have told you that I loved you." 2 & 5: "I truly didn't want to scare you away," "Call me anti-social, but talkative people bother me so bad."

The first and final short, one-sentence paragraphs bookend the piece like a riddle: "I'm so sorry," "I guess I wanted you more..." AND that ellipsis at the end! The tone of that final statement uncertain, as if the entirety of the piece were a mere moment, and the ellipsis the "coming back up for air," the resumption of life and the continuation of a time moving around the speaker, the boy, even the boy's inconvenient and talkative girlfriend, and their school. All of that possibility in three tiny dots clinging to the bottom of their line.

A meritorious "reflection," personally and structurally? I think it is, "emotion" be damned!

Urrgh, this was really emotional. I have trouble with throwing emotion in there, so I'm jealous of you. This was really good, I appreciated it a lot. I've felt this way many times.

This is nice! You've simply written down thoughts and experiences from an incident It was blunt, honest and not many people can write down something like this and just put it out on the web. That takes courage!

Keep writing!

The Reverse Edge Blade

This was a very emotional peace, not in the sense where it made me want to cry, but that I could understand how the girl felt as if I were in her place. Excellent job at accomplishing this.

This one touched my heart. A great job, Hermie!

Ahh. I feel like this is something I could say "Welcome to my world" about, even though I've never been in anything close to love. Relatable, in some way. It's simple and well-written, with a steady heartbeat and captivating details. Great opening line, killer closing line. Good job organising it.

That is exactly how I felt about someone I used to like, and still kind of do! The way you described him is exactly how I would have put it for my old crush.

great, close to tears once again. this is sooo good, a piece of advice that I read somewhere:
don't cry over someone that won't cry over you.
I guess that's easy for me to say and don't understand, at least not fully, but just think about it.
anyhoos that was great and I hope things work out for you.
Fizzy : )

I liked that _ 5/5 stars! i dont like people who talk too much either...