|Reviews for Crash!|
| Morbid Quill 10/13/12 . chapter 1
I am quite pleased about your careful attention to grammatical correctness. You seem to have a fine grasp of the English language and can manipulate it accordingly. I loved the description of the car crash you painted for your readers - it was darkly vivid, illuminating the agony of your character clearly.
However, I do have a complaint about the actual plot of your piece. It seems a bit cliché: deceased mother, abusive father, mocking teacher, traitorous friends. I have found that many "teenage woe-is-me" stories are that way, presenting a tale that seems so heartbreaking, yet is actually highly unrealistic...especially concerning the cruelty of the girl's teacher. The educational system makes it their goal to help all of their students feel appreciated and supported. It would not make sense for a teacher to risk his or her job to mock an unfortunate student in front of their entire class.
But other than that, I enjoyed this written work, and I am going to add it to my favorite stories list.