|Reviews for Never Quite There|
| VelvetyCheerio 10/14/12 . chapter 1
Review courtesy of the Review Marathon. Link in my profile!
I really liked the opening paragraph of this story. It sets the scene for something dark. I didn't instantly think of soldiers, but I did think of ragged figures walking through dark grounds. The description in that first paragraph really brings the story to life.
I did think there were some discrepancies in the piece, though. Like, in the opening paragraph it says that they are "driven on by fear and pain", but in the second to last paragraph it says that they no longer feel fear. That was confusing to me.
Overall a short, interesting story. Good work. :)
| Ophelia Schmit 10/13/12 . chapter 1
It's beautiful, and I have this idea that you based this off of ghost lore from a place? I don't know the name but it is believed that ghosts walk the battefield long after the war's been over.
| Owlwhisper 10/13/12 . chapter 1
That was really good! Very descriptive! It seems to linger after you've read it . . . I loved it.