|Reviews for Phantom's Story|
| MysteriousFire 5/11/13 . chapter 4
I liked the repeating the end of the last chapter in the beginning, because it helped me remember where this story ended last time!
I like how Ghassan wants Caiden to come back. It's sweet somehow.
"Any one of them could be the killer" you don't know how right you are Norbert... Ghassan must be feeling uncomfortable when he heard that.
Hahaha what is it with you and Monopoly? xD
"Some people are hard to figure out." That's very true!
You know, I recently watched Thor and Ghassan is really starting to remember me of Loki :P He feels guilty, he did bad things, but at the same time he does care.
"He'd find a way to play two roles, both her hurter and healer." For some reason I like that sentence.
I love Robert and Ghassan's talk! Especially how he random asked "Want a hug?" "No." made me laugh xD
"He sat up to get a better look at his friend." They did become friends rather quickly?
Now that's a cliffhanger! I wonder what Robert will do... Omg this is interesting I wanna read on you are torturing me! xD Okay while waiting for the next chapter I'm gonna write fanfiction about Phantom's Story in my head ;)
| VelvetyCheerio 5/11/13 . chapter 1
I thought this first chapter was nice. It was interesting and Ghassan seems like the type to do evil things with his new powers. But hopefully not!
| ChibiJinchuuriki 1/19/13 . chapter 3
Everyone's really supportive of Ottilia which is nice, but I'm wondering if Ghassan's going to be overcome with guilt one day, it seems like the guilt is already starting to get on his nerves :/
| Mylilblackpen 1/18/13 . chapter 3
Oh Ghassan is a lowlife, I mean how can he just sit there and pretend like he hasn't just killed Caiden? I liked this chapter, very powerful. I did like the comparison Caiden as the hero and Ghassan playing the villain. I just feel sorry that Ghassan destroyed a family because of his greed; greed has a nasty way of destroying things. Poor Yuki and Ottilia. Great chapter, look forward to seeing this develop more.
| jakbnimble 1/6/13 . chapter 3
Powerful chapter! I am so interested in Ghassan. Could this crime he's committed be changing him for the better? Maybe he'll spend his life trying to make it up to Ottilia and Yuki...
| CRAZEDbySUGAR 1/3/13 . chapter 3
poor Ottilia D':
Ghassan...I still feel no sympathy towards you XP grrrrr
AND GOSH DARN IT THE JERK HAS ARRIVED XP
| Firewind555 1/2/13 . chapter 2
Such a storm of emotional turmoil... I do believe the story should go on! It definitely can end like this.
| Firewind555 1/2/13 . chapter 3
I think i do see some hope for Ghassan,power and greed drove him to murder his friend, but you can see his vulnurabilities in this chapter-he felt remorse about deceiving his friends. Hopefully he turns out better later on.
| MysteriousFire 12/31/12 . chapter 3
Nice chapter! Ghassan is such a good actor, if he can go to the family of the guy he just killed and act normal and make up the thing about the smile and such..
I feel so sorry for Ottilia!
And you put Toshiro in the description, but where is he in the story? Or will he come in next chapters? Or did I miss something?
| CRAZEDbySUGAR 12/16/12 . chapter 2
...I now understand why you advised me not to read this chapter...
I started tearing up...
also I hate Norbert a lot :P jerk
so yeah...please continue...no end on sad note please DX
| DarknessesDownfall 12/15/12 . chapter 2
I teared up a bit D: Norbert is a total jerkface! Ugh! Continue! I don't like sad endings D:
| DarknessesDownfall 12/15/12 . chapter 1
'Yes', Ghassan thought with a smile forming across his face. 'This has to be where the power is coming from. Caiden has given me his power to wield while he is in the afterlife.'
...my reaction- "ARE YOU STUPID?! YOU JUST MURDERED HIM FOR MONEY YOU JERK!"
| Mylilblackpen 12/1/12 . chapter 2
Whoa, she must have seen quite a sight. I was silently pleading her not to go to Ghassan - he's the killer but she didn't listen! Thank God he wasn't home. Can I just point this out, Ghassan is a low life creep. Yeah he felt bad for killing now but doesn't have the guts to hand himself in; no he'll sell the gems in secret like a low life money grabbing douche - to put it politely and to go and fake comfort, well that's just wrong. I do like the idea that the kids felt the sad atmosphere because kids are quite good at doing that. I liked the grief scene - in a sense that she will feel upset because Caiden is gone and anger that he went so suddenly and so awfully. So maybe she needed to take it out on her jerk of a brother. Great chapter 2 - thought I'd share some of my comments of the whole chapter. Great I love it - can't wait to see more.
| Musician's BloodBreak 11/30/12 . chapter 2
Norbert is an *ss. Funny thing is, he's my stepdad xD
| ChibiJinchuuriki 11/27/12 . chapter 2
Caiden's death was really tragic, but I think you conveyed it pretty well. The beginning of the chapter had a happy mood and then it immediately changed to become quite heavy and full of despair.
Also, great use of short syntax, that last line was fantastic! Like you said before, snow is symbolic of peace and that very last sentence kind of added an eerie feeling, like something isn't quite right... :)