please do the rest of the story soon. it's been awhile since ive read a non-real book related story and I love it

Hey! I was looking on your review forum and I saw you ask for reviews. I quiet like this story. The characters seem pretty colorful, and everything has a different feel to it. It's a well written story.

I really like what you have going! I like the idea of a fully-functioning, beautiful underground city. And I especially like Kotik's character, and how eccentric he is. I think I laughed for ten minutes when he was demanding salt, like right now. :P

I can't see any errors that come to attention, so for the most part I'd just like to encourage you to keep it up!

I love the idea of this - hopefully there is more.

Great first sentence! It's hilarious, and it sparks interest well.

For waffles, I've only been to IHOP and another restaurant, so I could be wrong. You don't pay for one waffle for a price, you usually get about 4-5 for about $3 or more, once again depends on restaurant and quality of food.

As for selling her tootbrush, who would buy a used toothbrush? Unless it's new, of course, which I don't think you mention.

-Hermie

Really gripping so far, please continue, I want to find out what happens next!