I love the title of this chapter. I also like the juxtaposition of going from the alien struggle in chapter 18 to the realization in chapter 19 that they are missing.

I would love to know how you came up with the language. It's really, really cool. Does it sound as weird as it looks?

Is there a love triangle coming?

Beautiful image of Wren seeing her mother for the first time.

I love that her name is Wren. It really evokes a picture in my mind of what she may look like.

I really like the flashback. I was wondering how it all began.

I love the opening sentence. It pulls me right in to the story!

I think this is really good so far! There are a couple of errors that I think could have been fixed by a quick check after you were finished writing, but maybe you just missed them when you were looking it over. Regardless, I'm looking forward to more!

Wow. You're off to a good start.

I've never read Across the Universe. Is it good?