I love this! I really do, it's a very amazing, moving poem. I love how it has the nice shortness of a poem but the sense of a developing plot like a story. It's very, very moving. And unlike most of the stuff I find, this has a happy ending. I like that. :)

Just a few grammar errors, but nothin' to worry about.

It was, overall, very moving. Even though the structure was rather simply and short, I could still feel all the emotions, the unfairness, and the better ending. I really liked this story. It had a very moving start, and ending.

A few typos, though. But otherwise than that, I didn't notice anything else.

-Carolina :D

This one was very depressing for the girl, especially the 'Now she is just a picture on the Mantlepiece.' I liked how vivid the emotions were...

Another typo: [Sheused to giggle.] I think you meant to put a space in between she and used.

Even though it's very short, I can still feel a lot of emotions. Good writing! I noticed a mistake, [They say it might be nice to tal to someone.] I think you meant "It might be nice to talk to someone."

This is a very moving story... I feel like you can relate to this (if that actually happened to someone). I have nothing else to say. :D

Hi this is me please review this story!