Nate controls birds...Awesome!

Great chapter. wishing that i had a fake katana XD

overall, a realy good chapter. nice work!

hey, once again a good chapter. so, i just pm'd u like 15 oc's. cant wait to see the new team. i wauld suggest switching between the two teams at interesting points to create cliff-hangers in mid-chapter, for example:

edward enterd the chamber, and heard the doors close behind him. he then realized he was alone. he started to panic as he realized that he was stuck in the boss room, separated from his team. he then heard a growl behind him, and whirled around. MEANWHILE, the OC team stood at the dungeon gate, not knowing that edwards team was inside. the OC team stepped inside as the gates shut closed behind them, sealing them in...

See what I Mean. with that, you wont need to have a chapter end just to cause a cliff-hanger. using writing techniques like that can make a story ALOT more interesting. anyways keep up the good work. hope you can get the next chapter in ya.
Gortriss out

A nice chapter before I head to Hong Kong.. Perfect!

so, a cliff-hanger. introducing the egle guy. removing 1 skill. getting a map. getting rid of all their GS and spare items, and finding a mini-boss. as well as edward finding out the eagle guys name, Nick. once again, an absolutely ingenious chapter. you know, i still don't understand why you dont just actually make this a real game. personality, i honestly think you should! cant wait for the next chapter.
Gortriss Out

so now they are in hideing. i wonder what this "mainland" is. if there heading for the mainland, then where did they start off. please PM me its a bit confusing.

creativity and ingenuity. if this game were real I would buy a 5000 dollar VR system just to get it. keep up the good work!

a nice introduction to alex. a mysterious magical armor. very thnks for PMing me.

nice chapter. it seems that you are very creative. cool.

this story is very interesting. and it still just keeps geting better and better.

A great chapter. this story realy has potential. i just have one question. you said that 8 gem shards is 1 gem, but arent gem shards the curency. if u could PM me the awnser, thanks. But, aside from that, I realy like this chapter. You did a awsome job. if this game were real, i would go out an buy it right now. You are a great wrighter. I can practicly picture the story in m head. good job, again.

a good chapter, as always. i like the way you yoused Wolf to alter the details. if you wanted to, Wolf might even be able to change the plot.

overall, a good chapter. i like the way this chapter has creativity. you also do well at wrighting in 3rd person. good job.

Wow. you realy out did yourself. your work is exelent. I think it would be safe to say that you put a lot of creative thinking into this chapter. this is a good story.