Characters established very well with good dialogue and an interesting situation. Looks good!

This is fantastic, really well written and interesting. I noticed Berkeley called Forrest 'prince'- even though isn't Forrest a girl?- that completely piqued my interest. I will keep reading... and I'm curious to know what a nool is, exactly, too.

What an amazing storyline, absolutely love it!

[She tugged Gail's hand impatiently.

"Hurry up," she hissed, "or we're never going to find it."] You could combine those paragraphs into one.

["Come on" she hissed to her friend, "don't just stand there. Help me!"] missed the comma after on.

Well, you're off to a good start. This is a pretty good first chapter, and I'm looking forward to more. Cheers!