This one had me on edge!

Is this going to be developed into a novel? Or a longer short story?
Either way the story has great promise. It needs a good dose of editting but I like the idea and although the language can be altered here and there, it is good and engaging.

Well done!
keep writing

Love L
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this is very creep, but in a good way.

The run on paragraph style is distracting, but it's pretty well written. A few spelling errors (warmpth, spigot, and some lower case i's need to be fixed. You have a great sense of terror here, with the way the antagonist drags her out of the shower... he's pretty scary. Good stuff.

Wow...Despite some grammatical errors this is absolutely amazing. I love it :D