Well, it's different. But I like Of Duke and Peasant better,

Wow. Your surprise me everytime you write. This is an amazing piece of work! Wow. I'm awestruck. Wow. Amazing.

Your awestruck reader,
Clawstrike590

I really love the mechanics of this story. You showed that a significant other should be the one that a person faces their fears with. You showed that love could be eventual, and does not take multiple meetings to fall in love with another person. You showed that one cannot save another, but can help by facing it with her. You showed me a damned good oneshot. :) Thank you.

This is smashing! Brilliant indeed :)

Hey this is a really great story! However, I'm a little confused on the relationship between Juliet and her father because earlier you mentioned that her father left when she was young (it was one of the few things Kirk knew about her) and then in the end, we find out that he never left and instead abused her? It would be awesome if you clarified! thanks

That was amazing. I relate so much to juliet.
Keep writing my dear.
Thecheshirewold

That was lovely! You left me with a warm fuzzy feeling. A story of our ultimate desire, to be loved unconditionally. Love truly does conquer all fears.

This was really different from your other stuff and generally just other one-shots as well! I really liked it. )

Beautiful! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
Bubbly Girl

Beautiful ending.
At first reading the introduction paragraphs it was a little awkward because majority of my books/FP Stories are in third person. The ending was really great, a very smart way to tell your story like a movie in the past.
Keep posting. Keep writing. :)

Um just one small thing Kirk would have been 9 in '96 not 8 that is if the time is 2012 in the story. Just because it's suggested he was born in 1987.

That was one of the most touching short stories I have read in a long, long time. Incredible depth, characters, and ending. Amazing job.

that was beautiful :)
really well written!
even though it was a little long, i loved the flow of the story. great job!
could you check out mine and tell me what you think?
i'd really appreciate it :)
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