|Reviews for The Puppet|
| Ellie LaTraille 11/18/12 . chapter 1
Interesting prose-poetry style here. I like your concept and what you're doing with the structure, that sort of 'now-you-see-it,-now-you-don't' thing. I think you underestimate your writing power, though. You lay it on a little thick at the end there, and I don't think you need the last line. Your teaser line (is it you?) is perfect, and when you confirm it at the end, it takes away the chill of that initial question. A little more ambiguity and I think you're golden.