Cute. I like this because Lily actually talks like someone her age and because the characters are so real.

Oh you want reviews. Then don't beg for them! People may want to read your stories but then they read the last part and roll their eyes and leave it. Especially after the note at the end of this chapter. Don't. Ever. Say. You. Won't. Update. If. There. Are. No. Reviews! People WON'T review if you say that! I know you can do better.

Oh, if you want, you can make the older girl fall in love with the new neighbor and the other two kids mock her. And make Lily's friends visit her. And make them weird.