Tear ;'( I loved it 3 O just read past the small typos

I'd really like to know what the five themes of this essay are, since it's mostly about love instead of geography I have no idea how it would work! Not saying it's bad, I think it's a nice story, but it could be better than it is now. Perhaps try looking over the story once or twice more and getting some of those errors. Also there were all sorts of distracting things in this that leave me with so many more questions. Like who is Stargirl? Why was this amulet so important? Is his name actually Junior or is that just what they call him because he's new? I feel like a lot of this stuff is distracting from what you want us to focus on which is Mary's death. So maybe taking some of it out wouldn't be so bad. I did like the storyline however. I could sort of see how Junior could have (a crush I guess?) on Mary while they were working but I think for some people like JYates you might need to make it a little bit more clear. It was a pretty good story for an essay though and I wish you the best of luck!

Whoa! I had no idea that ending was going to happen. All that build up with Mary, just to have her die at the end was shocking. I feel like the interview would have been a little bit better if you had built up to Junior's declaration of love. Maybe including more snippets of him showing some affection for Mary would help? You know what they say short stories need to be focused on their effect to be good!