|Reviews for Heavy Gear|
| Master Chief 11/17/12 . chapter 1
This seems pretty solid so far, technically speaking. There were a few spelling errors that I grazed over in reading, so you should definitely double check if possible, especially for rankings.
With a name like Master Chief, you can safely assume I'm a pretty big Halo fan, that said, the references to Halo are too blatant, namely Avery Johnson. And I believe you copied verbatim Sgt Johnson's Legendary speech from the first Halo. I know you are from , but a few changes here and there, and it seems like you could have something completely original. You might wanna keep that in mind as you continue on.
You are pretty good with dialogue too, so it strikes me that you couldn't come up with your own speech for the SRT leader (not calling him Sgt Johnson).
I'm definitely interested in seeing what happens next, but I hope it's not a Flood analogue.
Looking forward to the next chapter!