Wow! These are poems are really good! :D You two are amazing writers!

I love the last line in this chapter. These poems are so dark and haunting.

I love the line "In the end the water didn't come out, just gas came out of the spout.." It's so realistic. I can't believe the things they did to people in this time period.

In the last line you said "My angry..." when it should be "My anger..."

i just LOVE your poems

Very moving! - hauntings dim, unfortunately suicide never gives us a second chance. Great work on a very touchy subject.

Muahaha I'm commenting on my own poem. And its legit XD

Wow. All these really paint a picture of tragedy. I like how you used multiple points of view. Both of you are great poets. :)

Very vivid descriptions, haunting and horrific, capturing the truth and making it seem so immediate and real.
These are a very clever collection, piecing together parts to make a brilliantly whole image and story.
Great job!

I'm glad that 'Their mental onslaughts on trail for vindicitive sins' has returned. That is an AMAZING line!
I also loved 'I know this place from a vision, From an alleviated dream'
In parts this chapter is almost the same as Chapter 2, reworded and re-phrased but still carrying its own character. Good job!

I like how personal this has been made. Taking one person, one situation, making it seem so much more real than an overall description.
Amazing!

Wow, this is amazing. The words captured the emotion perfectly, enabled the reader to understand.
I loved the line 'Their mental onslaughts on trial by vindictive sin'.
Really great!